Order In Decline (Chaos Reigns)
by @gwenthered
Liner Notes
Ok... I guess I was wrong about being done with my angry songs. This one's gonna have to go under Obsidian too. I just started writing and I couldn't stop and really liked the vibe of this one. I love that I was able to tie in some of the Children Of Chaos imagery that I had in mind with my first album. Kind of ties them together.
Oh! And surprise! No profanity! (Don't worry. It's all in the next song I'm putting up)
DEMO UPDATE: Ok. So here's a rough demo. I'm using FAWM to really experiment with my voice since this is really the first time I've tried to actually sing in a recording, and I need to keep reminding myself that these are just rough drafts. I was experimenting with a bit brighter of a voice tone in places but I don't think my training is far enough along to really make effective use of it. It was still fun for me to give it a try, even though it kinda sounds bad.
It feels a little flat to me. I think the vocals need to get a little more punk-y, the guitars are kinda boring, and I even missed a word or two from my lyrics... but that's what the final version is for. For now, that's another demo done.
Lyrics
(Verse 1) Born under the black sky of your domain. The dark reflection in your eyes covers us all. Every extension of yourself bears the stain Of blood and lies. And we dream of your fall.
We were bound in chains to protect your position Pushed down to our knees by fate's happenstance And now we face your unending derision and suffer in your endless self-aggrandizance
(Chorus) Now these children of chaos rise Fire in hand and steel-like will Born from the flames of all which you despise Ever in motion, sweeping through the still
Your command will face our rage Vindication for the scars that we bear And now as we set the stage We issue this challenge... Face us if you dare
(Verse 2) Your gaze extended to your next conquest It was not enough to command land, seas, and skies You felt nothing of our futile protest Our bodies your next horizon, amid our ignored cries
As beneath your regard under your foot we lied Violated, the desecration of that which chaos granted Stripped of our minds and souls, autonomy denied Prisoners of the obsidian lie you implanted
(Chorus)
(Bridge)
Your black night draws to its end
This is it. No more. This is the line.
Your life from your body, we will rend
Your counterfeit divinity in decline
Prepare yourself.
Today is the day you die.
(Chorus)
Comments
This comes out fast and hard! Really cool! I think this is the first time I've heard your voice and you should definitely let it out more because this is awesome. Yeah the performance could be a little bigger in the verses and you trip over the lyrics a little bit here and there but apart from that, sounds great! You can really belt! The half-time bit is cool and the build back up. Love the guitars and the variety in vocal melodies. Lyrics good too. I'm going to go with "dark but hopeful". Yep, nothing not awesome here.
This is flipping awesome. I can hear a blazing fast metal-punk song in this lyc sheets future. Great work and great use of the word self-aggrandizance. So cool.
@morti Thanks. I've really been struggling with my voice. It's hard when you've got no confidence. Like, I know I've got a decent voice when I just let loose... but I can't let loose because the second I hear that "guy", my heart just drops and I become super conscious about my voice and then my whole performance falls to shit.
I really appreciate how in depth your thoughts were, good and constructive (because nothing was really bad). I'm really needing the encouragement... as much as I don't want to admit that. Maybe next year will be better.