Love the lil swoops up on the guitar! Very cool feel to the 6/8 time signature - gives it a relentless feeling that supports these bleak, but poetic, lyrics. Love that switch at the end to "I passed", perfectly caps it off.

Been there done that. Good way to get out of the rain, etc. but still dangerous

Oh, man, love the driving energy right out of the gate! For me, the two verses starting "Trimmed my beard....thru...leave them alone" are esp. awesome. Also love the shift in tone in the "I need somewhere sheltered...." section. And I got chills when you sang "And I think I'm dying." I thought the song was over then, and I'd stop it right there. Whatever you decide, I like this a lot!!

An important topic - glad you chose this to write about. It's interesting how a list of song titles can bring up something that perhaps you weren't focused on? The gritty energy helps amplify the subject matter. Living in NYC I do see a fair number of folks who are "under the overpass" so I enjoy hearing a perspective that is meaningful.

This is so deep and real. I really like the chorus, and I like @raspberry33's suggestion to switch it around the second time.

That 6/8 rhythm is quite catchy - would love to hear this with drums/percussion and bass added. Let's not forget the people living under the overpass. Suggestion - maybe switch around the second chorus so the characters going under and over are now going over and under, emphasizing that things change and our positions in life are mutable.

The opening stanza here is such a great hook into the song, it paints such a clear picture. The whole thing is an honest and compassionate character study - really nicely done!

Good write! Captures the gritty details of life on the streets, with an empathy and clarity rare to find. The play with "over" and "under" works well.

The percussive guitar underlines the anxiety and anger of the narrator: the shift to a quieter accompaniment in the last chorus sent a shiver down my back, even before I had read the lyric to the end.

Sad song and comes across as very compassionate toward the protagonist in the story. I love "I'm carrying a weight Bigger than my grocery cart can contain." Love the grungy feel to the music as well.

I hear grunge and prog influences, I liked the riff change in the middle (around 2min). Thank you for this skirmish!

Really poetic, as well as catchy chorus, with the frequent repetitions of over, under and pass

You paint a very realistic picture. Great take on the prompt

I very nearly picked this title from the list, but another caught my eye. The hook line is very catchy in your chorus. Great chords