What Will Stay

by @newukenewyork

Skirmish: Echo (@hmstreetteam)
There is no demo for this song.

Liner Notes

First draft of a song from the skirmish prompt inviting us to use echoes -- I found myself drawn to the idea of writing around Charlotte Perkins Gilman's "The Yellow Wallpaper" (1901), about "hysteria" and the "rest cure."

Read it here (it's not long): https://www.google.com/books/edition/The_Yellow_Wall_Paper/4XsEAAAAYAAJ?hl=en&gbpv=0

This will need some revision.

Lyrics

Off the piazza’s a room filled with roses Forbidden to me in my curious state Here there are bars and some rings in the walls Everything’s yellow and orange and dull But John says the roses will wait The roses will wait

This is the room where they keep the mad women Who’re dreaming of wallpaper blooms And all your concerns about all our conditions Are bricks in the walls of our tomb

Between the echoes of our decay (the echoes of our decay) We learn what is fleeting and what will stay

So I take phosphates or phosphites, whatever And tonics and journeys and air I’m forbidden to work but allowed exercise If I wish to write then I have to be sly But still, the garden is there The garden is there

BRIDGE In my hysteria In my delirium Who waits behind the wallpaper? (waits) So full of humors Object of rumors, Who shakes behind the wallpaper? (shakes) I have false and foolish fancies I’m prescribed more rest, more brandy Who will peel it off and walk by day? (and walk by day)

This is the room where they keep the mad women Who’re dreaming of wallpaper blooms And all your concerns about all our conditions Are bricks in the walls of our tomb

Between the echoes of our decay (the echoes of our decay) We learn what is fleeting and what will stay

Comments

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Wow Really cool idea!! Love this lyric.

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@heather

Wow this is such a cool idea, look forward to a full song!! I love that line, “all your concerns about all our conditions are bricks in the walls of our tomb.” So good.

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@ragbag

Beautiful lyrics - and so obviously singable - I'm sure it'll make a wonderful and evocative full song. I'd love to hear the finished version when it appears.:-)

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@ohljazz

A well crafted story with so many lovely colorful details in the lyric - love the recurring image of the wallpaper (and wallpaper blooms)

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I love that the protagonist is well aware of the situation and rejecting other people's attempts to define her. I like the use of echo implied by the phrases in parentheses.

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There is a literary tone, going deep into the experience of being trapped by a whimsy of the modern world. That condition of being trapped applies to nearly all of us in multiple ways, and the societal advice on how to fix the problem is often just this delusional, so this is a song that could resonate with almost anyone. Nicely spun!

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There's such a strong rhythm to these lyrics, and it's such a compelling narrative! Really gorgeous skirmish work!

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