Final Bow
by @wondertruly
Liner Notes
#electronic #electropop #synthpop #wip
Behold, the fruits of another daily doodle! This is half a song and I'm pretty sure I'll end up finishing it, because WHAT??? How fun is this? It has been a difficult week around here, all my friends are struggling, I can't sleep without having stress dreams, and gosh DANGIT it's time to give the people an excuse to dance. And if not the people, then me, myself, and I. :)
Lyrics
Dead broke, so you stay inside But you know the world’s gonna pass you by Can’t cope with the weight inside You’re giving up the will to fight
All you gotta do is turn your favorite music on Give a listen to the lyrics of your favorite song Clear a space on the floor to move your feet
It feels weird, but it’s better than a body bag Raising stakes, it’s getting late, you gotta take it back Feel the rhythm as your heart begins to beat, harder nad harder
And I won’t give up on you now This is not your final bow You’ve got time to make mistakes To try again and reinstate I won’t give up on you now
Comments
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Oh, this is quite the danceable little demo! Love the lyrics and the whole vibe, def worth coming back to and finishing!
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That’s bound to speak to so many people right now! If I may offer a suggestion, I thought the “I won’t give up on you now” line came out of nowhere. The central character is shown coping by themselves for the whole song up to then and the main pronoun is “You”. Suddenly the narrator is showing up in the first person line but we don’t know where they fit in the picture. I would try to turn that line into a message about not giving up on yourself, unless you plan to add verses where you encourage your character to lean on their friends.
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A very uplifting pop feel! Yes, dancing is way better than a body bag. I feel you with the stress dreams - not good. It's a cool song!
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Great Demo. This sounds like you've got a lot of potential to really flesh this out into something bigger. It also sounds great as it is though. Love the sentiment that "you've got time to make mistakes".
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That better than a body bag line is perfect. Won me over right there 👌