Veil
by @dhiatt
Liner Notes
I wanted to try writing a song starting with the bassline, and I aimed at doing something moody and sparse. Not super happy with many elements of this, and it felt like I spent most of my time just grinding out the recording rather than rewriting the actual song to make it better. FAWM pressure is getting to me, I think.
Lyrics
It came to me Nothing is forever Nothing is saved From this life
A fog dissolved And everything was clear All I could have was This time
If I could I would Rip the veil from your eyes
We are born to die Not all of us will live Some of us may try We are born to die
Let the lights that dazzle your eyes Fade away Open them wide Drink it in
It may be The last thing you see This time
Won’t you rip that veil From your eyes
We are born to die Not all of us will live Some of us may try We are born to die
Comments
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I like this but kind of know what you mean - it doesn't quite take off. I think you might want to inject a bit more oomph into the instrumental before the last verse, and then really give that last verse some welly vocally and guitar wise?
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I love starting with basslines, but have not done it yet. You've already inspired me and I love the atmospheric guitar/bass/drum interplay at the start. Powerful transition into the metal section that has all that awesome vocal harmony going on too. So many elements in this one and I like what you've done. FAWM pressure is a real thing, though, and I hope you can push through. Good job on this one!
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The first lines I thought this will be a chill song bit the chorus hits hard. Big fan of the bassline and drums. Good experiment to start with a baseline. I should tru that next year!
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A bit of tool vibes here. For me the first part hit the hardest. The c-part worked well at 2:40 on it's own. I see what you went for here and admire your ambition!