The North End Paving Yard

by @tcelliott

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Liner Notes

#fullproduction #rock

Edit: It's Posted!!! This song is for the #CommentsFirst challenge (https://write.fawm.org/forums/3025).

A list of challenges and how I attempted to incorporate them into the song:

Yup, specifically the North End Paving Yard* - @jackdawfactories - Write about the Boston Molasses Flood Used the my guitalele in a not ballad - @coolparadiso - Upbeat Uke Bdim in verse progression - @mtmelodie - Use a dim chord in the verse Used my tele on the solo - @mtmelodie - twangy guitar solo (I tried my best) Pre-chorus lyric - @mikeskliar - whispering and screaming Bridge - @spikedirection - Use carburetor in a rhyme Bridge - @lyricslinger - Use handclaps for percussion Outro - @beto - Shits weak dog I tried but failed - @beacon - Kurt Weill delivery Unintentional combination: @jackdawfactories + @coolparadiso = Upbeat song about a downer subject

*Many of those who perished were listed at working at the North End Paving Yard.

Lyrics

You could feel the ground shake Hear the air roar As rivets fired into the crowd It flowed in a wave Sounded like a war A boom of stick mass so loud

It was quiet as a whisper Before you heard the screams

People came running All to lend a hand To try and save the victims Haul salt water and sand To the North End Paving Yard

Folks were hurled several feet By that rush of air At the moment the hard steel broke It flowed three feet deep Ran most everywhere The crowd scattered as it approached

It was quiet as a whisper Before you heard the screams

People came running All to lend a hand To try and save the victims Haul salt water and sand To the North End Paving Yard

You could hear the carburetors Of all the machines "Need" the arbitrator Of gas away from steam As the men were working All so very hard At the North End Paving Yard

People came running All to lend a hand To try and save the victims Haul salt water and sand To the North End Paving Yard To the North End Paving Yard

Comments

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@burr Mod

i dunno what to say other than well done tying together all the different prompts. particularly, like, 8+ of them... i don't think i could manage more than 5-6 at a time? remarkably cohesive and doesn't feel like a stretch at all. nice job!

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Wow. That's about all I can say. That you managed to fit it all in. And...yes...yes...it's upbeat! I love the claps. Simply wonderful challenge response.

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I cannot believe you pulled this off. Incredible work!

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Coming in to the comments after the fact. Cool song. North End Paving Yard certainly has a pleasing cadence to it, and the rest of the song builds from there. Loved the guitar solo and the hand claps certainly follow the rest of the song in headlong rush that is only interrupted by the slow down on quiet as a whisper. The line "haul salt water and sand" was great.

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Wow you really delivered on almost all the first comments. and it sounds like a a cohesive intended work, some mentioned George Harrison I also get a Guided By Voices association while listening but haven't listened to them since the 90's so might be misremembering...anyway this turned out to be a great song

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@beacon

Well, I don't know how you could have added in the Kurl Weil with all of these thing! Nice job.

The Molasses Flood is very common lore around here. It's said that on really hot days you can still smell molasses in the North End.

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Hand clapping. How did you ever get these prompts into your song? Very well managed, and cool song.

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@beto Mod

Oh, man... I feel the #CommentsFirst challenge is the best thing that was invented for FAWM! The songs are always so interesting and authentic — in yours the hyperspecificity of the story makes it feel so real! Maybe it's because the decisions made are clearly non-algorithmic, the combination of happy ukulele while singing about a molasses disaster has to come from a human. This is how we're going to beat all the AI-generated songs!

Great job on checking (almost) all the boxes (sorry but I have no idea who Kurt Weill is), everything fits so nicely. And thanks for including my silly comment!

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Well played! Top effort to get so much in a coherent and interesting song! Very good!

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ha, what a wild way to challenge yourself--- great fun, and yeah, I love that diminished chord in the verse- so George Harrison-y wonderful. riveting and wild story, and love that you got the 'whisper and scream' in there. lol at the ending!

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@nadine

Great chord progression. That dim chord there! Well played

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I love that descending 4-chord sequence in the verse. What is that (augmented?) 3rd chord - as you may know, my musical theory is non-existent. Yes, apart from the claps being a bit clean for the mix, I think this a great song. Maybe some harmonies on that chorus to accentuate the vibe even more?

Anyway I don't know why some people get production tips in my reviews and others don't, sorry about that! j$

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It’s so suprising to hear such a happy upbeat song from you I guess that uke helps.

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@beto Mod

Shit's weak, dog

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The hand claps percussion was a nice touch

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@beacon

I didn't expect such a Kurt Weil delivery. Good job!

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First time I’ve ever heard the word ‘carburettor’ as a prominent rhyme. Nice one!

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You know, I wasn’t expecting to hear a song about the great Boston molasses flood, but I think it rules.

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I love that combination of whispering and screaming... unexpected but really works!

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surprising chord progression really like that cheeky diminished chord in the verses, and that twangy guitar solo is short but so effective

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