For me this captures the struggle between the need for rest and recharging with the reality of the random chaos created by the director of subconsciousness. Also I am not thinking of very many songs along this direction. Glad to hear that this one will be developed.

@jeff9 I'm not much of a performer so I'm not sure it's the zoom quality was messing that one up. I remember starting that one out in the song circle and just thinking what the hell am I doing, this doesn't sound right. But meh, you win some you lose some. Better than leaving original sound off. Also, noon is too damn early to be singing anyway, I'm more of a night owl, haha. I think I'm missing some of that drive other "artists" have to put their work out in front of other people, on top of being born shy and being nervous in front of crowds. Grateful for this community and the song circle to try and break some of those shackles, otherwise it would just be me alone yelling at the walls in my basement.

At any rate, thanks for the comment. Especially love the idea of lusting over lines. There are certain lines I write because I feel a certain way, and when I sing them I can feel it again. Those are the best kind of lines and that line is one of them.

I also like to believe listening to others in the song circle and on fawm have helped me a ton in realizing harmonic resolutions, especially at the end of choruses.

In song circle, I was really taken by the hook line of "I hope I dream of love", which seems to me like something so familiar we should've heard it in a dozen songs, but I don't think I ever actually have. To me, those are the kinds of lines worth lusting about coming up with. But having the chance to sit with your lyric and song with more of a chance to dig in, I'm really impressed with how deep and artful it really is. And your vocal really delivers and showcases the intimacy and pain of the lyrics much more effectively with this clean recording of your voice than the sound quality of a Zoom call usually allows. Keeper here, Lee.

very nice, I like the dynamics and the mood of the song. The acoustic guitar is perfect for this song.

I especially like that line “talking about your feelings don’t make it clear” and the way it could be about a relationship partner or a therapist. I’m also struck by all the kinds of dreams the singer might be talking about in “I can’t stop these dreams” I really like the high notes in There’s a whole in my life. Feels so raw and vulnerable.

Dark, beautiful, and brooding. Its like you bottled 4am into a song. The melody suits so well, and your voice brings the lyrics to life in such a beautiful way. I especially loved your singing on the chorus, that "hoooole" is epic! I didn't hear the flat in "psychology"; I personally liked where you took that note, I felt it suits the message well. The hoping to dream of love is an idea that hits really hard. Why do dreams have to be painful on top of everything else? You capture all those feelings so well. Really amazing write, and outstanding performance!

Sounds great! I really like the quality of your voice. Great lyrics, melody and guitar playing.