Your Inner Light
by @saulius
Liner Notes
#spiritual This song feels a bit long and monotonous, but I don't know how to fix that. I tried putting in a key change.
Any suggestions, or if anyone wants to try modding it, I'm open.
Lyrics
I was wandering through the twilight of the evening When I stumbled on the footpath of a church An old man came and took me through the doorway And though he saw I wasn’t injured He could see that I was hurt
I said thanks, but you don’t know the man you’re seeing 'Cause there's one thing that you've got to understand You should turn away and tell me to be leaving Although I thirst, I am cursed For I am not a praying man
And he said, Dash the darkness of illusion Find your inner light Shine it on your footsteps falling On your path tonight There’s no use in your lamenting all the things you lack Don’t curse the burden on your shoulders Bless the strength of your back
Remember, our Redeemer also was a man And he had to walk alone that day With that burden in his hands And He stumbled on the footsteps And He stumbled as He died And through His trials, his Father smiled And whispered as He cried
Dash the darkness of illusion Free Your Inner Light Shine it on their footsteps On all the paths tonight Let there be no more lamenting Let them never lack Place their burdens upon Your shoulders I will take them back
His sermon made the darkness of the street part As he spun these words of Hope upon my path I went back home and kissed my childhood sweetheart Told her I was sorry, and if she would take me back
Then we went inside and saw our babies sleeping And I knew just why I had to try once more In that room I found what I was seeking It was the simple light of love And it filled me to the core
Dash the darkness of illusion Find your Inner Light Shine it on your footsteps falling On your path tonight There’s no use in your lamenting all the things you lack Place your burden on His shoulder You are welcome back
Comments
Very nice, I'm struck with this idea of blessing the strength of your back. :) Great playing by the way. :)
I agree with @cts if you’re looking to shorten it, however I think a 4.5 minute song in this story-telling manner is just fine and can be pretty necessary when you want to convey a spiritual message like this! “Don’t curse the burden on your shoulders Bless the strength of your back” was a really nice line I enjoyed very much. Great write. Nice melody and guitar playing here! Of course a great message here, as well.
Beautifully rendered. Perhaps the length could be shortened by going from "and whispered while he cried" and start the next section, omitting the varying "chorus". Otherwise, the style and tone are very fitting for what you have here.
I do agree that it feels a little long, but that almost seems like a feature of the type of song it is. Great job.
A lovely invitation of a song 💚weaves the story so well