Great addition to the"jilted and bitter":sub genre of "break up songs". I love how you paint this cad in brief brush strokes in the last line of the first verse.

Oh this is so good and so relatable. I came for the title and the chorus did not disappoint! The heartbreak detail of sleeping on the afternoon...yup. Been there. Too many times. The site is going down very soon, but I be would be interested in setting these lyrics to music, if you're still interested in that, even though it won't be posted here in time for anyone to hear it. Either way, I really enjoyed reading this!

I love these lyrics about being on the broken end of a breakup! Really nice title/hook that says so much about the person's mental state. I think the card game references were a nice touch too! Very nice lyrics!!!

Oh this lyric is so poignant and powerful. I really love the hook as it creates a sense of melancholy. I wish I had the musical skills to bring this to life and I hope someone else will before the end of FAWM.

Powerful lyric, particularly the repetition of “I sleep in the afternoon”. The “ace up your sleeve/I folded” lyric was particularly effective. Well done!

I clicked on this thinking it was going to be about taking afternoon naps and the joys it brings, was not expecting the sad turn of events. Its a fresh way of describing the depression and sadness that comes with a breakup. #tit4tat

Well played! The card game references are great, laid out like a card at a time and subtlety integrated. It sings off the page. I hope you get music. I’m basically a lyricist too, so I can’t help, but I sure can appreciate.

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Very poignant. Very hard hitting. Conveys the message in a beautiful rhyme. I can definitely hear the music while reading. Very good lyrics! #tit4tat

I love the sleep in the afternoon lyric - it really gets the sadness of the song's protagonist so you can understand exactly how they feel (hope it's not a true story!) Nice work!

I particularly like the chorus, though the story in the verses is clear and poignant. Nice metaphors. #tit4tat

I like how the card game phrases sneak up on me. Ace up one's sleeve is very clearly alluding to cards, but then I look again and there's the "heart on the table" and "two of a kind" and so on. Well-played. :) #tit4tat

This is a perfectly captured sentiment of loneliness and the anhedonia it brings. I remember the feeling well being in that position. Love the imagery of the poker game as a metaphor. Nice write!

Interesting idea of using sleep in the afternoon for heart break. Took me a while to get the card game thing but yes cool lyrica

This is a heart-wrencher of a breakup lyric. I feel so bad for the narrator in the lyric (whom I am hoping is not you actually!).

Very well written and expressed. Nice use of the card game metaphor. Heartbreaking tale though, ooof.

I like this lyric a lot. The chorus is especially emotive. That's a great title.