I really felt this. It's so sad. I've had a long distance relationship, although we were just using our phones to type to each other most of the time. But those first two lines, absolutely 100%, that was a thing. I love how you show the conversation kind of devolving into nothingness, which totally can happen. Nice write!

Makes me sad to think that these lyrics won't make any sense to many folk (young'uns, I mean) who read them. But I remember those days well, and have placed many a long-distance call (through the operator, yet!!) and paid so much money for saying and hearing so little. This is a lovely bit of writing, metrical and conversational -- "Just so on and so forth and then such and such" has a melancholic ring to me... Crying for a country tune -- I can already hear the pedal steel echoing the chorus! I like this a lot!

yeah the very subject places this in an era. Nostalgic in a way... But in a more up to date way, it does remind me of therapy! the last bit. the first bit without the money side is true of modern communication platforms. I like how there is something behind the blanks, not that there is nothing to say, but you don't know how to say it.

i like the dull commonplaces that make up a phone conversation. the first three lines are promising but then......we dont pay for long distance phone calls anymore.

@moonracoon Yes, please. Alter at will. bonus points for loonies and toonies. If you want i can add you as a collaborator and mark as private til you are ready to add.

I remember rotary dialling and party lines and needing change for pay phones (The last generation in Canada took Loonies and Toonies for $1 calls; cellphones certainly damned them to obsolescence, but I still believe it was their failure to give change for Toonies that extra-damned them.) I may have music for this, though it might not be in a style you're hoping for. If that's cool, I think I could wrangle a second verse by putting the first verse in the past tense, but would it be cool with you if I tried to add some words?

It's a good idea and concept that could do with some tweaking.
I can see what you're trying to do and I like all the random small talk, instead of the things you need to say

This feels like it needs to be given an old-school treatment; does anyone make long distance phone calls any more? Mind you, with the announcement this week that MS are going to shut down Skype in May, maybe such things are about to make a comeback!

Hope it doesn't sound wrong but this sounds like a classic country song to me. The casual conversation and reflection are written out nicely and sing right off the page. For those of us who remember coin operated payphones that is 😎

Takes me back to having to pay for phone calls by the minute (and waiting for it to be after 9pm so it's cheaper). Some great lines and themes in here.